There are some fantastic elements to this film, the pace is excellent, giving a feeling of a slow start with a build up towards the end of the opening. There is a variety of camera shots, angles and movement and your narrative is starting to become clearer.
In order to help with progress think about the following:
- Sort out the sound glitches and differences in volume.
- Think about adding some more ambient sound to the opening
- the music makes it feel too much like a trailer - think about losing this entirely and replacing with interesting sound effects
- build up your flashback scene, using an aftereffects zoom into the eye. This will help the narrative flow better. Ensure that this part has a clear colour differentiation so it is clear this is a flashback.
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